OU [OU] Clefable (QC 1/1) (GP 1/1)

[Milak]

Clefable @ Sticky Barb / Choice Scarf
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 HP / 252 Def / 4 SpD
Bold Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Moonblast
- Soft-Boiled
- Trick
- Stealth Rock

Clefable is one of the most prominent utility Pokemon in OU. Trick is this set's main tool, and, when combined with a Sticky Barb, it allows Clefable to cripple threats such as Volcarona, Rotom-H, Toxapex, Excadrill, and Corviknight, the latter two being key targets, as Sticky Barb undermines their ability to remove entry hazards and therefore augments Clefable's role as a Stealth Rock setter. Trick + Choice Scarf, on the other hand, completely shuts down passive walls like Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Blissey by locking them into one move. Partners like Excadrill and Reuniclus greatly benefit from the pressure Sticky Barb slowly puts on the aforementioned entry hazard removers and from Volcarona and Rotom-H losing their Heavy-Duty Boots. Setup sweepers like Volcarona and Bulk Up Corviknight will have an easier time setting up on Toxapex and Blissey, as the former will be forced to lock itself into Haze, whereas the latter won't be able to stop Volcarona while being locked into one move.

 

[Milak]

This is ready for QC.

 

[Jordy]

Hey, before I check this, I'd like to see more emphasis put on Trick. These are supposed to be set spotlights and right now this reads a lot more like a general overview of Clefable in the OU metagame. Also, it's meant to be Bold and not Calm Nature, my bad for that.

 

[Milak]

Did!

 

[Jordy]

Okay, this is still really not what we're looking for. I'm going to go a little more in-depth this time. We know what Moonblast and Soft-Boiled do, there is no need to mention them so early on, or even at all. At most, they should be an off handed mention. Trick is the main feature of this set and really what needs to be focused on. When talking about Trick, this doesn't quite focus on the right targets either. It is imperative to highlight that Trick cripples common entry hazard removers like Excadrill and Corviknight, which greatly amplifies Clefable's effectivity as a Stealth Rock user. Crippling Pokemon like Toxapex and Ferrothorn should be a secondary mention to that.

This spotlight in general certainly can shed more light onto Sticky Barb and Choice Scarf too; the appeal to both needs to be explained, rather than just be mentioned off handedly.

None of the mentioned partners really stand out either. Sticky Barb puts a lot of extra pressure on Pokemon such as Rotom-H, Toxapex, Excadrill, and Corviknight. Make note of Pokemon that can take advantage of that. Pokemon like Volcarona and Bulk Up Corviknight are great alongside Choice Scarf variants as Toxapex will be forced to lock into Haze if it wants to get anything done, which is easily taken advantage of.

 

[Milak]

I've rewritten this.

 

[Jordy]

comments in purple things to remove in red

Clefable @ Sticky Barb / Choice Scarf
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 HP / 252 Def / 4 SpD
Bold Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Moonblast
- Soft-Boiled
- Trick
- Stealth Rock

Clefable is one of the most prominent utility Pokemon in OU. Trick is this set's main tool and, when combined with a Sticky Barb, it allows Clefable to cripple threats such as Volcarona, Rotom-H, Toxapex, Excadrill, and Corviknight, the latter two being key targets, as Sticky Barb undermines their ability to remove entry hazards and therefore augments Clefable's role as a Stealth Rock setter. Trick + Choice Scarf, on the other hand, takes care of passive walls like Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Blissey by locking them into one move and completely shutting them down. Partners like Corviknight, Zeraora, and Skarmory greatly benefit from the pressure Sticky Barb slowly puts on the aforementioned entry hazard setters removers and from Volcarona and Rotom-H losing their Heavy-Duty Boots. I don't think these are the best examples of Pokemon that benefit from having Excadrill and Corviknight crippled. Your own Excadrill benefits greatly from the extra chip damage Sticky Barb does to Corviknight, and Reuniclus benefits greatly from the extra damage on Excadrill. I think those two are the best examples to mention here, instead of Corviknight, Zeraora, and Skarmory. Setup sweepers like Volcarona and Bulk Up Corviknight pair well with Choice Scarf Clefable, as they'll take advantage of Blissey and Toxapex, respectively, and will have an easier time setting up. What you mean by "as they'll take advantage of Blissey and Toxapex" isn't really clear. Explicitly mention that Toxapex has to lock into Haze and that Blissey can't really afford to lock into any 1 move against Volcarona.

This is much better, good job, 1/1.

 

[Milak]

Implemented.

 

[kt3]

Slightly above character limit, so I put a slightly more liberal edit. This should now have 998 characters.

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Clefable @ Sticky Barb / Choice Scarf
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 HP / 252 Def / 4 SpD
Bold Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Moonblast
- Soft-Boiled
- Trick
- Stealth Rock

Clefable is one of the most prominent utility Pokemon in OU. Trick is this set's main tool, (AC) and, when combined with a Sticky Barb, it allows Clefable to cripple threats such as Volcarona, Rotom-H, Toxapex, Excadrill, and Corviknight, the latter two being key targets, as Sticky Barb undermines their ability to remove entry hazards and therefore augments Clefable's role as a Stealth Rock setter. Trick + Choice Scarf, on the other hand, takes care of completely shuts down passive walls like Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Blissey by locking them into one move and completely shutting them down. Partners like Excadrill and Reuniclus greatly benefit from the pressure Sticky Barb slowly puts on the aforementioned entry hazard removers and from Volcarona and Rotom-H losing their Heavy-Duty Boots. Setup sweepers like Volcarona and Bulk Up Corviknight will have an easier time setting up on Blissey and Toxapex (I think you got these two switched, unless I missed Blissey having Haze now), as the former will be forced to lock itself into Haze, whereas the latter won't be able to stop Volcarona while being locked into one move.

 

[Eisenherz]