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You really seem to like the word "hax". I personally wouldn't use it unless something with next to no chance of happening takes place (like 4 fully paralyzed in a row for example).
However the battle was pretty fun although not that complex. Keep it up.
Not a bad warstory. I agree with the others that there were several serious misplays, but the comments weren't bad, and describing the pokemon's attidudes was neat. It's also nice to see that Deoxys-Attack is actually used sometimes, I find him very cool.